MR.Conner: A SHORT STORY & writing advice

One morning, Amelia Horowkiwitz, disappeared. Her husband and kids woke up to find her not being there. Her husband was named Abraham Horowkiwits. They had 2 children. One was nearly 16, and the other had just turned 9. The month was December. They ran outside, screaming for their mother, as their dad screamed for Amelia.They saw a man walk by, but they payed no mind to him. They should have. The children were terrified. They turned around to see that their father was gone as well. They searched for him, but never found him. Suddenly, they felt something come over them. Some formula or potion made them fall asleep. When they woke up, they were standing on a tall, widely stretched plateau of bare land. It was in the middle of the desert. Nearly 20 men And 15 women stood in front of the children. By the way they older child was named Elanora, but they called her Ella.And the younger one was named Faustus, but they called him Flint as a nickname. All of the people were staring at them. "Hello, children", a man said in a sinister way. "Now it's time to for the feast!", he said, as everyone except one man laughed. Ella noticed that the one man who didn't laugh was familiar. He was the man that walked by on the street. "Now everybody, dig-!", right as the sinister man was about to say "In", he stopped when the man they recognized jumped towards the children, knocking them off the plateau. The landed perfectly, straight up in a red Convertible at the bottom of the plateau.He began to drive. "Traitor!", the sinister man screamed down at the man who helped the children. "Sorry, children. You'll be safe now", he said with a smile on his face. Ella smiled at him from the front seat, and Faustus who was surprisingly smart for his age, living up to the name, smiled at the kind man as well, as they drove away. "By the way, My name's Marcus Conner".

Marcus Conner (2009)

ADVICE:

When writing it makes the story better if you include exact numbers. Like how I said Nearly 20 men and 15 women. Also try to add unique names if possible to add more creativity to the story. Like Elanora or Faustus. Try to use old or out of date names. Also, describe the setting. Like how I said they were on a bare plateau in the desert. Also sometimes if possible, try to add a cliffhanger to the story. It makes for an interesting mystery. Like how I ended it with him revealing who he was, implying it will go into more detail about him in Part 2 of this story. Also if you enjoyed this story subscribe to my website and please continue reading for more writing tips! Leave a like if you enjoyed this story or advice! And make sure to please read the next part of this if you enjoyed it! Bye!