IN and OUT: A Short Story & Writing advice

Cedric James lived In a large modern apartment located in a building on the streets of New York City. He lived with his wife, Athena James. One morning, he woke up to find something was different. His wife was gone. He assumed she went shopping or out somewhere. He was right, she did go out, just not the kind of out he thought. She went out of the world. That night when Cedric came home, his wife still wasn't there, and he began to get worried. Except what he didn't know was that, that morning he was in the real world, but the second he came home he was he one out of the world. You see, each time they left the house and came back, they would go back and forth out of the world. They would go to a place that was exactly the same. Or so they thought.

If you were to go over to their apartment in this world, you would find Athena there, as of right now. But when she left the house and went back she would go to the other one. They were both so alike that they kept leaving the house at the same time. If one of them just stayed home while the other one went out, they would see each other. Except they couldn't communicate. They each thought the other one was missing, they called the police. Except they of course didn't find them.

So they each were forced to stay in that world. They didn't know for how long, they didn't even know that they were in separate worlds. Maybe they'll find out soon, until then wish them luck.

Advice:

Sometimes if you have already used a word, say it again but in a different way.

For example: "How can I escape from this world?", Athena said. "I must figure out a plan", Mrs. James spoke, although she could barely call herself Mrs if she never could see her spouse.

Notice how I said Athena, and then Mrs.James. Also how I included the part about how she could barely call herself a Mrs. Add in little things like that, that makes the story better.

Also add in things about scenery like how he lived in a modern apartment. That gives the reader a visual picture of your story. Thank you for reading, please come back next time for more writing tips and stories!